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Today I saw a girl on the bus,
who had the deepest sorrow glazed across her eyes,
she sat three rows in front of me and took the window seat,
She stared out through the glass,
sun rays peaking through the trees as the bus was moving,
the way the light hit her face, beautiful.
Simply beautiful.
She traced an outline of a figure on the window,
then quickly looked around and rubbed it out.
I wondered what's on her mind?
her face expression showed a flicker between emotions,
from sadness and sorrow to quick bursts of happiest and joy.

She got up, the bus stop, she walked past and looked at me.
For a brief moment I felt her pain and her hurt,
every time shes been knocked down and every time her trusts been misused,
the way people cursed at her and the way people beat her,
all the times she tried to hide and all the times she sat alone and cried,
everything she wanted to be and everything she wanted to let go of,
the battle scars she reflected on her skin,
and the battle scars which were reflected on her heart.

She wasn't a stranger to me,
We could relate her and I.
She got off the bus, I journeyed on.
Both of us go in different directions.
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theLUsir Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
The constant change in verb tense and Active/Passive verbs can be distracting.

But I like how you relate two strangers, two different lives, that connect in a single moment and then continue on their personal journeys.
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flippin-nuggets-25 Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
that is so sweet!
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MusicIsAnAddiction Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
It's sad...I wish I meant that much to someone on my bus..but I'm everything this girl is..except admired. That whole thing with someone being able to relate? Yeah, there's no one like that for me.

That's why I love this poem so much.

It gives me hope. :heart:
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redcatmoonlight Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012  Student General Artist
I believe there is someone for everyone just sometimes we have to wait. I used to believe that no one could ever relate to me or that no one could ever like me, or want to be with me because of the way I am. This led to many situations I regret but fight on another day.
Some days still are 'dark' just never give up :)


And thank you, your comment has given me a sense of hope in its way. :)
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MusicIsAnAddiction Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
It is hard to believe, I've been waiting for 13 years, going on 14. I hope that one day things will get better permanently instead of going back and forth between good & bad.

I had tried to give up a long time ago, but something stopped me.

Thanks. It's no problem.
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crashmypartyhard Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
very lovely--is this imagination or real life or a dream...?
anyway, love it/
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redcatmoonlight Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012  Student General Artist
Thank you :)
it's from my imagination x
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crashmypartyhard Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Very cool (:
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anonymous-yet-again Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012   Writer
This is really good.
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Ask-Felicity-Witch Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012
very unique and well writin
i very much like this short story because oftin set by the window and ill stare out for house lost in thougfht if you`ll let me
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